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The bar chart below shows the divorce rates of two Europion countries in 5 years(2011-2015).

The chart above illustrates the
amount of
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divorce
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rates
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taken of
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in
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 both
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 starting from years of 2011 to 2015. Units are measured in
precentages
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percentages
.
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,
Sweden
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 is the leading rate
of
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in
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 the chart.There
is
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are
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 more
divorce
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rates
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 during the 5 years in
Sweden
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.
Finland
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 is considerably
close
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closer
 to
Sweden
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 in some years.
Finland
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 started off the
year
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 2011 with
divorce
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rates
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alomst
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almost
 hitting 35%.
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 it stricted down to almost 30%. Following up
to
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on
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 the
year
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 of 2013 and
2014
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2014,
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 it rose again to the same rate
in
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 2011.
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 it stated constant in the
of
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year
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 2015.
Sweden
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 started
strong
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strong,
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 surpassing
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finland in
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Finland by
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 over 5%
it
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; it
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 was almost 45% for
Sweden
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. It
gladley
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gladly
 doubled up to almost 55% in the following
year
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. Making a slight fall in 2013 and hitting almost again 45%.
it
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 kept
fluctucating
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fluctuating
 in the upcoming
year
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aswell
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as well
. Meanwhile in 2015
Finland
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 noticabley overtook the
year
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 by almost 5% over
Sweden
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. ending the
year
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 with minimal
diffrence
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difference
 between
both
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the
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divorce
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rates
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, rates, finland, sweden, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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