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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

“Some people believe that governments should spend more money on public transport instead of building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

There is no denying the fact that
increase the
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 public
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transports
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transport
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 has several advantages in many areas.There is
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 an argument that
oppose
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 it.In my opinion,
i
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I
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 consider that spending significant funds on public
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transports
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transport
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instead
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 of
,
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apply
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establish
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establishing
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 new
rotes
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routes
,
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will be extremely beneficial for protecting
environment
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the environment
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 and reducing
the
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air pollution.
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 with, providing different sources of public
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transports
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transport
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 for locals will reduce the use of cars.
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, when passengers start to use these
transports
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, the air pollution that
come
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comes
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 from car emissions and
effect
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affects
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 the air will be significantly
shrinking
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reduced
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.
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, some countries
such
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 as Japan and Korea provide
a
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new eco-friendly vehicles
in
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at
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 affordable prices , in order to decrease the level of pollution inside the country. Another point to consider
,
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that affording a significant
amounts
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amount
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 of
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transports
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transport
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,
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 will increase the opportunity to have
a
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new jobs for unemployed people. It is
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 possible to say that
,
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apply
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 governments
who
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that
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 provide their citizens a chance to improve their lives
,
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notice a huge
jumps
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jump
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 in the economic systems.
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, the statistics from a
Germany
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German
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 university
,
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demonstrate rates of sharp
increasing
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increase
 in
economy
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the economy
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 for some countries after
involve
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involving
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 new jobs in their regions.
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, Italy
recored
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recorded
 a higher
figures
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figure
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due to
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 the new railways that recently
has
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been established. In conclusion ,
deposits
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different
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 people
having
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have
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 different views
, i
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. I
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 believe that
,
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when governments pay more attention and time to improve their transportation systems
is
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, it is
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crucial more
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more crucial
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 than
waste
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wasting
 funds and energy on
the
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new roads and ignoring the real needs of locals.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this clear in all parts.
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Develop each main idea more. Explain how better public transport helps people and why this is better than new roads.
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Use examples that fit the main idea closely. Some examples are not fully clear or may not strongly support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences simple and clear. Start each body paragraph with one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Some sentences are hard to follow because the order of ideas is not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. In one paragraph, keep one main idea and then support it with explanation and example.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure with introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You use examples from different countries, which helps show your ideas.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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