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Writing Samples
Band 6

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013

The maps illustrate
comparison
Correct article usage
a comparison
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 of the layouts of a natural
Museum
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 between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
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, the building of the natural
Museum
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 in 2013
larger
Verb problem
was larger
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 than
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the 2010's
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2010's
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2010
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 building,
while
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garden
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the garden
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was disappered
Wrong verb form
had disappeared
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 in 2013. Turning to the details, in 2010, the building of the natural
Museum
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 consists of an entrance and a ticket desk in the lobby
was
Correct pronoun usage
, which was
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 connected to
ocean
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the ocean
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 hall. There were
also
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 two zones for
mammal
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mammals
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 and dinosaurs.
Right
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On the right
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side
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 of the building, there is a garden.
On the other hand
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, in 2013, there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 several differences
of
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in
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 the
natural
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Natural
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Museum
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. There was no big change in the lobby, but the ocean hall
was
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had
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 gotten bigger.
In
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On
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 the left
side
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 of the building, there were rooms for dinosaurs,
ice
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the ice
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 age and
insect
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insects
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. The
mammals
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mammal
 area was moved to the right
side
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 of
ocean hall
Fix capitalization
Ocean Hall
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.
In
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On
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 the right
side
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, the building was added
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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instead
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 of the garden. The new part of the construction used for shops,
cafe
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cafes
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, and human
ongins
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origins
 display
as well as
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 mammals.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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