You have a friend who lives abroad. You have decided to apply for a course at one of the colleges in his city. Write to your friend explaining Tell them about the college and the course and why you want to do it. Ask for their help to find accommodation if you get admission to the course.
Dear Shae
The reason I am writing to you is to tell you about my recent change in life.
To begin
with, I decided that I want to study in your city. Can you believe it? I want to apply to Oxnard University for a Bussiness-Administration
course. The reason I want so is because I consider myself to be a creative person and I think Correct your spelling
business administration
this
education will help me to build my own business. However
, I do not feel that this
university and the course are what I was made for, but it is the best optimal variant. Also
, I would like to hear your opinion on that.
Secondly
, I wanted to ask you for help with finding a good flat for me. I am sure you know better than me. I would definitely like to live near you if it is possible, of course. Additionally
, I thought about living with you for some time if you don't mind, I think it will be fun.
To sum up
, I can't wait to see you and my new university. It will be an unbelievable experience.
I look forward to your reply.
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Structure and Development
The letter successfully conveys your intentions but could benefit from clearer paragraph division and more focused development of each idea. Try to allocate one paragraph for each main idea to enhance clarity.
Tone
You've chosen a casual, friendly tone which suits the context of writing to a friend; however, be mindful of maintaining a balance between informality and clarity. Avoid abbreviations or overly casual language that could obscure meaning.
Tone
You've effectively used a personal, engaging tone to communicate with your friend, which is perfect for this context.
Greeting and Closing
You opened and closed the letter in a friendly manner, setting a warm, inviting tone throughout.
Enthusiasm
Your excitement about the course and moving is clearly conveyed, making the letter enjoyable to read.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,