The graph below shows information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. write 150 words

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The line chart illustrates how male and female
membership
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changed over the period from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, the number of men’s
membership
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fluctuated more than women’s
membership
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, reaching two major
peak
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before falling sharply
at the end
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of the period. Female memberships increased gradually over time. In 1980, male memberships stood at just over 2.000, which was about twice
of
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apply
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the
women
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women's
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figure. Male
membership
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then
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rose sharply to 4.000 at the mid-1980s before sharply falling to around 1800 by the mid-1995s. In 2000,
It
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it
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started to increase until 5.000 by 2005.
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, female memberships started at just over 1.000 and
then
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increased steadily until reaching
to
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a
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peak of around 2.800 in 1995, which is before falling to just over 2.000 in 2000. After that,
women
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the number of women
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groups
growth
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grew
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to just under 3.000 before the end of the period. In 2010, women had more participation than men, as seen
on
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in
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the figure,
dropped
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which dropped
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sharply to below 1.000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words membership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Steady increase
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Surge
  • Membership uptake
  • Gender disparity
  • Health consciousness
  • Fitness regimes
  • Societal norms
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographic shift
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