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đŸ”¶Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. 🔾Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the advancements in technology, the
world
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 has become progressively digital. The trend of professional meetings and training sessions conducted virtually is increasing exponentially
everyday
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. Personally, I believe that
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 ongoing fashion has more benefits
that outlive its
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 drawbacks. One key benefit of facilitating online engagement and mentoring sessions is that it is very
time efficient
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time-efficient
 and
cost effective
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cost-effective
.
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 is because people can participate in the meetings and training conferences from anywhere around the
world
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regardless
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 of their geographical positioning.
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, remote or
web based
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web-based
 briefings are beneficial for financial savings.
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, workers
donot
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do not
 have to travel and
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the time
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 spent on travelling is eliminated.
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, the work results can be pretty structured and productive. Another crucial advantage is that online conducted collabrations provides more opportunities for an individual's
overall
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 professional growth and development. Businesses can reach the best teachers, trainers, clients and partners from other cities or countries.
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The Internet
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 has made information and connection assessible throughout the
world
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.
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, an individual can grow extensively with resources made available to them by the businesses from around the globe.
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,
last
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 year, arborists were able to implement a preventative method for beech leaf disease (an invasive disease outbreak in beech trees
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 southern Ontario) by fostering
collabarations
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collaborations
 among arborists located in
Northern
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North
 America. From the above arguments and examples
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 I believe that delivering meetings and training sessions on the web is far more relevant
that
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than
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 organising them in person. It not only acts
an
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 economic
assest
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asset
 and improves time management but
also
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 acts as leverage to connect with
the
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apply
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professionals and
bussinesses
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businesses
 throughout the
world
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Answer both sides more clearly. You say the good points are stronger, but you do not explain the bad points enough.
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Give one short paragraph about the disadvantages, then explain why they are less important.
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Your main ideas are clear, but some sentences are too general. Add more direct explanation of how each point helps business.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. This is good for easy reading.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. Some are good, like 'as a result' and 'for example', but do not use too many long phrases.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas do not connect smoothly because of word choice or grammar mistakes. Keep sentences shorter and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has one main idea, which is good. Try to develop each idea with one clear example and one clear result.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion from the start.
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You include examples to support your ideas, which helps your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is organized into introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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Most paragraphs stay on one topic, so the essay is easy to follow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • save time
  • save money
  • travel costs
  • work faster
  • join from home
  • learn at their own speed
  • recorded lessons
  • flexible schedule
  • reach more people
  • business growth
  • human contact
  • body language
  • build trust
  • teamwork
  • technical problems
  • poor internet connection
  • lose focus
  • pay attention
  • face-to-face communication
  • outweigh the disadvantages
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