Some people think that modern communication technology is having a negative effect on social relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, many people tend to use modern communication methods in order to keep in touch with their loved ones.
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, it could be ultimately beneficial for some individuals, but other audiences thinks contrast. I agree with the opinion
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tiny effects,
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I mainly stand against
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reasons.
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, for some aspects, a number of consequences and remedies, let us
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say that modern communication technologies
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our cognitive and social skills simultaneously.

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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view the same.
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Add one clear main idea for each body part and explain it with a simple example.
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Write a full essay with an ending. Your text now is too short to fully answer the task.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas flow in a clear order: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid unclear lines like 'other audiences thinks contrast' because they break the flow of meaning.
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You introduce the topic of modern communication clearly at the start.
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You try to show your own view, which is important in this task.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking ideas like 'Firstly', which helps the reader follow your text.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial relationships
  • meaningful conversations
  • notifications
  • long-distance relationships
  • online communities
  • social networks
  • social anxiety
  • digital communication
  • real-world interactions
  • over-reliance
  • detrimental effect
  • inhibit
  • deep social connections
  • distract
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