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Some people believe that students should not be given homework, while others claim that homework is very important in education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Diverse opinions exist regarding whether
students
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 should be given
homework
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 or
they
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if they
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 are better off without it.
While
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 some individuals think
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 is not necessary, I would argue that it is important to create chances for
students
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 to implement their knowledge in practical ways to support development. On the one hand, adding extra work to a student’s already fully loaded school day is stressful.
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, it can create mental and physical troubles for
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. When
students
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 are unable to complete a certain task, they feel irritated
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this
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, in turn, can lead to them struggling with sleeping problems.
Additionally
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, most of the
students
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 lack a purpose when given a home task. They do not have clear objectives as to why they are doing it and what the
homework
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 is trying to achieve.
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, when
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 are asked to do more math problems at home as part of their
homework
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, they tend to view it as a repetitive and rudimentary task.
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, it is crucial that they understand it creates an opportunity for them to solidify their knowledge.
On the other hand
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, I believe that
homework
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 is essential for a student’s academic development.
First,
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homework
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 provides extra practice. By applying the same principles to a different situation,
students
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 can learn a great deal about certain mechanisms. Take biology
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 example, in a
classroom
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classroom,
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 they learn about how a certain plant
photosynthesizes
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. Once they figure out the process, they can observe other plants as part of their
homework
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. Not only will
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 activity allow them to understand a natural process, but it will definitely be enjoyable.
Secondly
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,
homework
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 creates opportunities for
students
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 to apply their knowledge in real-life situations. As an example, a student learns about difficulties a character encounters in a book and the solutions he thinks of to evade these troubles. By developing critical thinking skills,
homework
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 aids
students
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 in
maneuvering
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 problems they encounter in their daily lives. In conclusion,
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 some people
recognize
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 the need to eliminate
homework
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 from the curriculum, I believe that it serves a purpose and supports a student’s development both in and out of the classroom.

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task response
For task response, you answer both sides and give your own view, which is good. To get a higher score, make your opinion even more clear in each body part, not only in the start and end.
task response
For task response, some ideas are good but a few examples feel a bit general. Try to use more direct and real examples to make your points stronger.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear shape with good paragraphing. To improve, make some links between ideas more natural so each point grows step by step.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, a few sentences are long and carry too many ideas. Split them into shorter parts so the meaning is easier to follow.
task response
For task response, you discuss both views and clearly give your opinion. This matches the task well.
task response
For task response, your main ideas are relevant and you try to explain them with examples.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, the essay is easy to follow overall, with a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, you use linking words like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', 'Firstly', and 'Secondly' well.
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