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the graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural household in a europian country that had internet access between 1999 and 2004 .

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The bar graph below represents the number of urban/ suburban and rural
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household
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households
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 in a
europian
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European
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 country that had net
access
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 in the middle of 1999 and 2004 Overview :- the highest point of urban/suburban and rural is in 2004
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, which
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 is 55% and 35%
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 the smallest point is in 1999
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 is 15% and 2% .
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 , we move to urban/suburban in 1999
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 have 15% and rural have 2% of
household
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internet
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access
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.
Then
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 we move forward to
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year
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the year
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 2000 , in
this
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year
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 urban/suburban have 30% and rural have 5%
household
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internet
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access
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 .
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 , in
2001
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2001,
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 rural have 10% and urban/suburban have 40% of
household
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internet
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access
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.
On the other hand
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 , urban/suburban
have
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areas have
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 50%and rural
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areas have
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 15% of
internet
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access
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 in the
year
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old
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apply
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2002. We move forward to
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year
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the year
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 2003 , urban/suburban
have
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areas have
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 51% and rural
have
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areas have
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 25% of
internet
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access
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. And the
last
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year
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 is 2004 . In
this
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year
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year,
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 urban/suburban
have
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areas have
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 55% and rural
have
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areas have
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 35% of
internet
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access
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, access, internet, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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