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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

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The chart illustrates information about the number of households in millions
,
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 in the US
according to
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 annual
income
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 throughout the period between 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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 the annual
income
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 categories exhibited varying trends over the given period,
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whereas,
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three of them showed fluctuation during the time, and some were constant without remarkable change. As the graph shows, the lowest incomes started at around 25
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 and just above 25
million
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, followed by 50,000-74,999 $ and 75,000-99,999 $ at
approximatly
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approximately
 20
million
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 and just under 15
million
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, and the highest
income
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 was around 30
million
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 in 2007.
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, the first two categories began at just above 25
million
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 and almost below 30
milion
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million
,and the third
one
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 was around 20
million
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, and the
forth
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fourth
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one
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 was slightly under 15
million
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,the
last
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one
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 was just under 30
million
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 in 2011. Regarding the first two
amonut
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amounts
 of
income
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 commenced at just under 30
million
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 respectively, and the third amount was around 20
million
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and
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, and
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 the fourth
one
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 was around 15
milion,
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million. Also,
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also
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 the fifth amount
which
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, which
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 was the highest reach a peak just below 35
million
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 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, million, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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