The graph below shows the per capita consumption of whole milk and low-fat milk in the United States between 1970 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the
consupmtion
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consumption
of whole and
milk
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with low fat in
gallons
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for each person in
US
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the US
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in the period of 1970 to 2015.
Overall
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,
this
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graph shows the decline of whole
milk
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milk
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and
opposite
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the opposite
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for
low fat
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low-fat
milk
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. There are reductions, increases and
also
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stability in
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diagram.
Firstly
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, in 1970 the number was 25 which was the highest point for both
milk
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types and it decreased to 20
gallons
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per person in 1980 which is followed up with 14-15
gallons
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in 1990, which in
this
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year usage of both
milk
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types were equal,
however
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this
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equality did not
last
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long, as whole
milk
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continued to decline and reaced its lowest point in 2015 with 5
gallons
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whihch is similar to low fat
milk
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in 1970.
Additionally
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,
former
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the former
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widespread
milk
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decline the most
in
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between 1980
-
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and
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1990.
Secondly
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, the low fat mik started as the opposite
with
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, with
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starting on its lowest point and
then
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increased until 1990
which
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, which
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was
equality
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equal,
as mentioned before, and
then
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stability
has been
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was
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observed until 2010
and
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, and
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that means total consumption of
milk
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has
been
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decreased, because
low fat
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low-fat
milk
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was stabil where whole
milk
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usage was still in its degradation.
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,
this
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usage
struckt
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struck
down more with the eventual decrease of
lw fat
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low-fat
milk
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until 2015 . Ultimately,
low fat
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low-fat
milk
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became much more popular
between
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among
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individuals,
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also
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and
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total
milk
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per capita went down to nearly 20
gallons
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which
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, which
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was above 30 in 1970.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, gallons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • preference
  • significant
  • decline
  • rise
  • trend
  • gradual
  • surpass
  • pattern
  • shift
  • healthier options
  • approximately
  • amount
  • between
  • overall
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