The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The diagram illustrates the location of a school in 2004 and the plan for
changes
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its location in 2024.
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,
In
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in
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the future, the plan will not change a lot in the
edutional instatution
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educational institution
.
The
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As the
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student numbers
predict
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are predicted
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to increase, the new building and
park
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will be added. First of all, The sport field will be replaced by
second
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a second
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car
park
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. With
this
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, some trees can be cut to build the
park
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.
By
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the north, the
sport
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sports
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field will be added,
the
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and the
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new main road will be built to connect the second car
park
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to the main entrance.
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, the new
park
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,
little west
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Little West
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, the third school building will be added
, from
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the west, the path will be cut by
new
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a new
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connection between the first school building and
second
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the second
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building, when the path will be ended in the connection. By the far west,
he
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the
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first car
park
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will
remained
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remain
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the same. Under it, from the south,
The
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the
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road will
be stayed
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stay
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the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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