Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in major cities in Viet Nam. What are the reasons for this? Suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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It is a concerning fact that the rate of crimes committed by young people is rising sharply in major metropolitan areas in Vietnam.
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as high youth unemployment, and propose viable measures to tackle it, including government job creation programs.

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Write a full essay, not only the start. Add body parts and an end.
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Answer both parts more fully: why crime goes up and what can be done.
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Use one or two clear examples to support your ideas.
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Link ideas in a simple clear way. Each part should have one main idea.
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Add a clear ending that sums up your answer.
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Make sure each main point is explained, not only named.
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The start is clear and shows the topic well.
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You mention both cause and solution, so your direction is good.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas follow a logical order in this short part.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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