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The table below gives information on the salaries of secondary teachers in five countries in 2009.

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The table above provides information on secondary school teachers'
salaries
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 depending on the period of employment from 5 countries, which include
Australia
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,
Denmark
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,
Luxembourg
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,
Japan
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, and
Korea
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 in 2009. It's noticeable that
Luxembourg
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 and
Korea
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 showed the highest
proportion
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 of
salaries
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 of secondary teachers over the entire period,
while
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Japan
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,
Australia
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, and
Denmark
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 stood in second and third positions.
Overall
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,
Luxembourg
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 had by far the highest teacher
salaries
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 throughout the period,
while
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Japan
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 and
Korea
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 showed the longest time required to reach the top salary level.
According to
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Luxembourg
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, the
proportion
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 of
salaries
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 of secondary school teachers started at 80,000 in 2009, and after 15
years
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, it showed a dramatic growth to 112,000 per
year
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, with a maximum of 139,000.
Moreover
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,
Korea
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 started at 30,500 per
year
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, and after 15
years
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, it depicts a rapid growth to 52,600, which is the maximum
proportion
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 of 84,500. ,
However
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,
Australia
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,
Denmark
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, and
Japan
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 showed almost the same
proportion
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, where
Australia
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 started with 34,600 per
year
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, and
Japan
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 started with 28,000 per
year
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. After 15
years
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,
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 illustrate almost the same
proportion
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, with
Australia
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 standing at 48,000,
while
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Japan
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 stands at 49,000. The maximum for
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 was 48,000 and 62,4000.
Denmark
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 started with 47,000 per
year
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, and after 15
years
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, the number of
salaries
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 stood at 54,000, which held the position at the same number
of
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as the
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 maximum.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, australia, denmark, luxembourg, japan, korea, proportion, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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