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The process shows the design of a modern landfill for household waste.

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The given diagram illustrates a blueprint of a modern landfill for household wastes.
Overall
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, there are four main stages for
junkyard
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a junkyard
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: household refuse is kept , and toxic liquids are removed from the landfill by the use of a system of pipes. So, as for the construction of a junkyard, it commences with a man-made break dug into the ground above natural rock. Once the hole has been dug, it is
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 lined with a thick layer of clay and drainage pipes are added
on
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 the lower part of the hole. Before adding pipes, a synthetic lined over the clay.
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,
such
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 equipment will hold toxic waste substances from leaching into the surrounding earth. In the remaining stages, it is ready to be filled with household waste.
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 the liquid of wastes comes out and seeps into the ground. After
fulling
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fully
 house wastes,
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, the steps are as follows
once
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 the rubbish has been converted into a mud-like compound, the landfill is mixed with clay, and in the final stage gasses emitted
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 of the conversion are eventually pumped out of the hole.
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 gases are being released from the pipe to the local population.

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Task response: Explain all main parts in the diagram in the right order. Some steps are missing or not fully clear.
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Task response: Use correct words for key parts. For example, say landfill, waste liquid, and gas pipes, not junkyard if the picture shows landfill.
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Task response: Avoid wrong ideas. Gas is taken out through pipes; it is not released to local people.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Group ideas into clear paragraphs: overview, building stage, use stage, closing stage.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link steps with simple time words like first, next, then, after that, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make each sentence clear and short. Some parts are hard to follow because too many ideas are in one sentence.
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Task response: You gave an overview and showed that the process has main stages.
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Task response: You mentioned key features like clay, pipes, liquid, and gas.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The essay has paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the process.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You often try to show time order with words like once, then, and finally.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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