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In the future all cars, buses and truck will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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The world is changing rapidly,
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 includes the transportation system in various cities. In the
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 future, the need for drivers to drive vehicles
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 will be something from the past.
Driveerless
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Driverless
 system will be considered, and will replace the classic way of
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This
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alteration
 may have some
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benefits
 and drawbacks, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 the advantages of shifting to driverless vehicles
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it is
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 obvious
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 traffic in urban areas will
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 reduced.
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 will be achieved,
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 the fact that these machines are provided by artificial intelligence, capable of determining
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 the speed and the distance of the trip.
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, travelling will
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 safer, since it will eliminate the factor of human errors on highways.
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,
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 step canavoid terrified accidents caused by unconscious drivers, driving under high alcohol consumption.
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this
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develop
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development
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transportation
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 system may have some disadvantages, including the loss of job opportunities in
this
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feild
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field
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This
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 replacement will lead to a situation which is hard on truck and
buses
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 drivers, who will
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 needed for their services.
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 individuals who consider driving as a method of entertaining
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 will be
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negatively
 impacted.
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 a change will kill their passion
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 driving In conclusion, I argue that the benefits of shifting to
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driverless vehicles outweigh
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 drawbacks, as safe roads
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 a priority for any city in the world.

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task response
For task response, answer the question more fully. You say the good points are stronger, but you can explain more why they are stronger than the bad points.
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For task response, add one more clear example. For example, you can give one real case about road safety or jobs.
task response
For task response, make your ideas more clear with better word choice and fewer grammar mistakes, because some parts are hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good. Keep this simple plan.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, link ideas more smoothly. Use words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'as a result' in a careful way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, develop each main point a little more. Some ideas are short and need one more sentence of support.
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You clearly give your opinion in the end, and this answers the main question.
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You discuss both good and bad sides, so the response is complete.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs for introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow most of the time.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon footprint
  • public transport
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerable to hacking
  • mobility solutions
  • liability
  • ethical concerns
  • initial investments
  • maintenance costs
  • fuel consumption
  • optimized routes
  • transition
  • sectors reliant on human drivers
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