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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

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The line graph illustrates four different sources of
air
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pollutants
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,
such
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 as trains, industry and
households
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, separating total
air
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pollutants
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 in uk from 1990 to 2005.
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, total
air
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pollutants
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 and industry downward trend over the period,
while
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households
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 and
transport
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, some fluctuations throughout the
yea r
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year
,
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.
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, a noticeable the
households
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 had the lowest common type of
air
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pollutions
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pollution
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. AT the beginning, total
air
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pollutants
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 started at 7
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990,
in
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contrast
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contrast,
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transport
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 started
to
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at
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 approximately 5
thousands
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thousand
tonnes
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 in 1990, it climbed significantly
nearly to
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to nearly
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 3
million
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tonnes
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and
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, and
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 it
then
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 decreased gradually to reach 2 rate of
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air
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2 million tonnes
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pollutants
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 in 2005
,
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on the other hand
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, total
air
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pollutants
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 reached about 3
million
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in
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tonnes in
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 2005. One other positive side,
households
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 and
transport
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 started less
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then
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than
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 2
million
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tonnes
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 in
uk
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the UK
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 in 1990
,
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.
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 After that some fluctuations between 1993 and 1999,
wherase
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whereas
transport
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it
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apply
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began to
slightly
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increase slightly
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steadily and it reached to
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and steadily, reaching
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 2
million
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in
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tonnes in
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 2005,
in addition
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households
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were
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apply
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significantly
decrease
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decreased
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 to nearly
at
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apply
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0
million
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tonnes
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 in uk.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, households, transport, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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