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The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the most popular galleries among
people
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 who visited them in 2011.
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, there were considerable differences in the popularity of the galleries. The most popular art place attracted the highest number of
people
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 with a noticeable gap,
while
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 the least visited gallery welcomed substantially fewer
people
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. The most popular place for visitors was the
Louver
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Louvre
 in France, with approximately 9
million
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people
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.
Second
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 most popular was The Metropolitan
Museum
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 in the USA, which attracted around 6
million
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 visitors.
Also
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, the British
Museum
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 was just below 6
million
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, which makes it approximately the same as the Metropolitan
Museum
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. The remaining galleries were less popular. The National
Museum
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 of Korea welcomed 3
million
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,
while
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 the Museo del Prado welcomed almost the same number of
people
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, and the State Hermitage received the lowest number of visitors.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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