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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line charts below illustrate the possession of several electrical devices and the
numbers
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number
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 of
hours
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doing
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spent doing
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 housework in a country from 1920 to 2019.
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, the household percentages of all three electrical appliances experienced significant growth over the period shown.
By contrast
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, the amount of time doing chores per week declined. As for the changes in possession of
appliance
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appliances
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, the proportion of
refrigerators
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refrigerator
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 ownership experienced the fastest surge, recording from
naught
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nought
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 in 1920 to 90% in 1960. In 1980, all families in
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 country owned a refrigerator.
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, the figure for washing machines ranked first in 1920 at 40%,
following
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followed
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 by that of vacuum cleaners, representing 30%. The proportion of vacuum cleaners
incresed
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increased
 rapidly in the following years to reach 100% in 2000,
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 the share of washing machines fluctuated, rising to over 60% in 2019. Regarding the housework, the number of
time
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times
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 per family was 50
hours
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 per week in 1920.
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,
this
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 figure significantly fell to 20
hours
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 in 1960. In the following years, it appeared
a
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more gentle slope to 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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