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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given complex line graph illustrates the number of
passanger
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passenger
railway
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 journeys completed by three different
railway
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 systems in the UK, between 1950 and 2004/05. Figures are given in millions. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that both
national
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the national
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rail
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 network and
London
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the London
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 underground
rail
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 track
collaboratively
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have
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 made the highest number of journeys
than
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compared to
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 light
rail
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 & metro systems, that begun in mid 1960s.
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.
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,
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 as the most
prefered
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preferred
railway
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 category, the National
rail
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 network system stood at 1000 at the beginning, at the same time, the London underground
become
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became
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 the second most popular
just
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, just
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 lower than 750. More pathetically, the National
railway
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 system
sexperienced
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experienced
 a
noticiable
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noticeable
 gradual
decreased
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decrease
 to below 750, before reaching its peak approximately at 1100 in
late
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the late
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 1950s.
Similary
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Similarly
, the London Underground
systematic
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system
 trains
,
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apply
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 dropped to 500 in
early
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the early
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 1980s, reporting its
the
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lowest number of tours, before demonstarting a considerable fluctuations from the beginning. More positively,these giant industries were able to ensure their
domaninance
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dominance
, by increasing above 750 travel goals
in
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by the
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 end of the 1980s. It is worth mentioning the fact that
,
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 light
rail
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 and metro systems, grately, safe guarded their demand, by reporting a considerable growth after 1980, depite its sloght decrease at the
biginning
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beginning
. In comparison, both
of
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the
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 national and underground
railway
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 sectors
,
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 ensured the highest transits across
period
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the period
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, reporting a considerable gap between them and light and metro rails, which remained around 750
railway
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 crossings,
at the end
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 3 times.
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