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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent lexical in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming only language to be spoken globally. Advantages and disadvantages?

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Introduction
English has become the most common
language
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 worldwide
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 the increase in international travel. It is claimed that it will eventually become the sole global
language
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.
Although
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this
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 could facilitate communication and reduce the risk of fraud, it could
also
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 limit access to historical texts and result in a loss of cultural identity.
Body paragraph 1
One major advantage of English becoming the main
language
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 around the world is the ability to communicate with anyone. Since everyone would speak the same
language
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,
this
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 would reduce misunderstandings and make interactions easier, particularly when working, living or travelling abroad, as there would be no
language
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 barrier.
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, being able to understand others regardless of their location or situation could provide greater safety and reduce the risk of being deceived.
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,
due to
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language
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 barriers, many tourists are scammed when visiting non-English-speaking countries because they may not fully understand the services they are paying for.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, eliminating other
languages
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 would result in a loss of linguistic resources. Younger generations may no longer be able to understand historical texts,
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 as literature written in their ancestors’
languages
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, or fully appreciate what has been passed down to them.
This
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 could lead to a loss of cultural identity and traditions, as many of these are closely connected to the original
languages
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 of their communities.
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, in Saudi Arabia, people speak several Arabic dialects, each of which reflects the history and heritage of the communities where they developed. These dialects help distinguish people from different regions and create a sense of belonging.
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, replacing these
languages
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 with English could weaken
this
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 cultural connection over time.
Conclusion
In conclusion, having a single global
language
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 could facilitate communication and reduce the risk of fraud when travelling abroad.
However
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,
this
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 benefit would come at the cost of losing access to historical texts and weakening cultural identity and traditions.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task well. You show clear good and bad points, and your view is clear. To make the answer even stronger, add one more short idea about how one world language may help study, work, or trade.
task response
Your examples fit your main ideas. The tourist scam example is clear and useful. The Saudi dialect example also supports the point about culture. You could make this example more exact by saying how a dialect keeps old songs, stories, or family words alive.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear plan: an opening, one paragraph for good points, one for bad points, and an ending. Each paragraph stays on one main point, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “Moreover”, “For instance”, “On the other hand”, and “Therefore”. Try not to use too many long sentences in a row. A few shorter sentences would make your ideas even easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
The ending sums up the main ideas well. It could be slightly stronger if it directly says that keeping local languages is important, even if English is used by more people.
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You give a full answer with clear advantages and disadvantages. Your points about easy talk, safety, old texts, and cultural life are all related to the topic.
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The essay explains ideas, not just lists them. For example, you show how a shared language may help tourists avoid being tricked.
coherence and cohesion
The main ideas are in a sensible order, and the reader can move easily from the good side to the bad side.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening clearly states the two sides you will discuss, and your ending returns to both sides in a clear way.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Lexical
  • Global language
  • Improved communication
  • Understanding
  • Economic benefits
  • Educational opportunities
  • Information and knowledge
  • Global business
  • Professional opportunities
  • Cultural diversity
  • Linguistic heritage
  • Linguistic inequality
  • Language and power imbalance
  • Limited access to information
  • Threat to minority languages
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