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Your Overseas friend has invited you to visit his country. You are planning to visit him. Write a letter to your friend, In your letter. •Thank him for the invitation & accept the invitation. •Write detail about your visit. •Briefly describe what you want to do there.

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Dear Ali, I'm writing to thank you for your invitation, and I'd like to visit your
country
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. I think it can be a great opportunity for me to become aware of your
country
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's traditions and customs
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 spending quality time with you. I'm planning to visit your
country
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 on September 25 for two weeks. I want to book a bus ticket because its price is more affordable, and I can watch the
country
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's outstanding landscapes throughout the journey, enhancing the
overall
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 experience of the trip.
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, I will arrive in the city you live in on September 26 at 2 p.m. ,
according to
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 the bus company's claim. I'd like to spend more time in traditional settings,
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 as museums and castles, as I can develop a better understanding of your
country
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's cultural background.
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, I'd like to explore the Eynali Mountains , overlooking to a breathtaking view of the city.
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, I'd like to swim in your city's salty lake because of its medical benefits. Thank you again for your invitation. I hope to see you as soon as possible. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
You answer all parts of the task well. Add a short line about where you will stay or ask your friend to meet you at the bus stop. This will make the visit plan feel more real.
task response
Some details are very long, such as the reason for taking the bus. Keep the main points clear and use more space for plans with your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: thanks, travel plan, and things to do. Use simple link words like "First", "Also", and "Finally" to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Keep place names and times on the same line. Do not break the date and time into two parts.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. The last activity paragraph is clear, but it could be split into city places and outdoor plans.
task response
You thank your friend, say yes to the visit, give travel details, and explain what you want to do there.
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Your plans are clear and personal, especially the visit to museums, the mountains, and the lake.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with a friendly opening, clear middle paragraphs, and a warm ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing fit a letter to a friend very well.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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