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Some people believe that online education is more effective than traditional classroom learning, while other disagree. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
It is often argued that
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 traditional classroom is more effective than online education.
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, others believe that traditional learning is more effective. In my opinion,
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 other has some valid points, I firmly believe that the old school study style is more useful than the E-learning style.
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On the one hand, there are clear arguments in Favor of Zoom or Google Meet classes. The principal reason for
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 is that online teaching can decrease attention among students. To illustrate
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, if the student encounters a technical or electrical issue during the class.
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, a loose or lost connection
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may occur
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 a poor WIFI signal.
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, there are several things that will be missed, like informative, focus, and participation marks.
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On the other hand
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, a strong case can be made for the traditional learning style. The main justification is that old school classes are more useful, effective, and beneficial.
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 is mainly because the students can have a full experience. A good example of
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 is during chemical science lessons that required special equipment.
Conclusion
In conclusion, processing both perspectives, I am convinced that on-campus lessons will always be my safe choice among new technologies.
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 technology provides benefits to us during daily
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, it does not provide benefits during learning.

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Discuss both views in a fair way. Your first main part should explain why some people think online study is better, but it mostly explains its problems. Add points such as learning from home, saving travel time, and having class at any time.
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Make your own view clear from the start and keep it the same. Say that classroom learning is better because students can ask for help at once, work with others, and use tools for science or art.
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Give fuller support for each main idea. For example, explain how a teacher can see when a student does not understand and can help them in a classroom.
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Use examples that clearly prove the point. The science class example is useful, but explain that students need lab tools and teacher help, so online class may not be enough.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, online learning view, classroom learning view, and conclusion. This plan is already there, but the first main part does not match its topic well.
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Make each paragraph start with one clear main idea. Then add an explanation and one example. Do not move from online learning benefits to online learning problems in the same paragraph unless you clearly say why.
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Use simple link words to show the path of your ideas: “First”, “For example”, “As a result”, “In contrast”, and “Therefore”. Use them only when they show a real link.
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Avoid repeating “more effective” and “more useful” without saying how. Name the reason each time, such as teacher help, class talk, time, or access to tools.
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You give an opinion and support classroom learning with a real example from science lessons.
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You include both online and classroom learning, so the essay stays on the main subject.
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The essay has an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion, which gives it a clear basic shape.
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You use helpful link words such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For instance”, and “In conclusion”.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
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  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • class
  • teacher
  • student
  • study
  • learn
  • home
  • school
  • lesson
  • course
  • program
  • classroom
  • pace
  • time
  • flexible
  • access
  • materials
  • video
  • recording
  • feedback
  • test
  • exam
  • grade
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • benefit
  • problem
  • solution
  • support
  • need
  • opinion
  • agree
  • disagree
  • balance
  • combine
  • practice
  • theory
  • subject
  • discussion
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • community
  • face
  • face to face
  • group
  • team
  • interaction
  • life
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