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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map demonstrates the changes
of
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 a
school
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 between 1985 and the present.
Overall
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, the number of students has increased, and some new departments have been constructed inside the
school
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.
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, we can see clearly that the playing fields
has
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 been shrunk and replaced by a new pool and Fitness centre. On the West of the map, there was a library in 1985, but now it has been replaced by a Learning Resources Centre with a Computer room inside it. In the Northwest of the Playing fields,
The
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Classrooms
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 and small
car
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park
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 were demolished, and the
Classrooms
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 have been relocated between the Pool and Learning Resources Centre. The Office beside the Entrance still remains. In 1985, the
school
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 had a road connecting the
Car
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park
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 on the North side of the map with the Playing fields, but now the road has disappeared
and
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 trees
were
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 planted on it. The
car
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park
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 was
also
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 transformed from a rectangular shape into a semicircle. The old Classroom block on the South East of the
Car
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park
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still
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 in the same place, but it was constructed
one
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 more storey than the old one in 1985. And in the middle of that Classroom block and the new Playing
fieds
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fields
, they built another new
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Classrooms
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Classroom
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, and the total number of
classrooms
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 at the moment is higher than in 1985.
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, the
school
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 population
also
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 has a significant difference; the numbers are 1500 and 2300 in 1985 and the present day, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, classrooms, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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