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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Introduction
It is often argued whether hosting global sports
events
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 provides benefits for a nation or if it results in a negative impact. In my opinion, hosting international competitions,
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 as major sporting
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, yields a positive economic impact for the host
country
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 and the residents who live there.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, some people argue that it is better to avoid international athletic
events
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 because they often feel distracted and annoyed by the influx of foreign visitors.
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 is frequently because certain countries are already struggling with traffic congestion issues.
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, in small nations like Bahrain, the streets are often narrow, and significant traffic problems arise when a global event occurs.
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, some residents oppose hosting international
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 in their
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, believing it to be a disadvantageous idea.
Body paragraph 2
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, those who support the concept of hosting international sports
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 often highlight the economic advantages. If a
country
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 hosts a global event, particularly a sporting one, there is typically an improvement in the national economic situation.
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, following the 2022 World Cup in Qatar, there was a significant increase in the number of company branches that opened.
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, local residents often feel satisfied with hosting
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 the employment and business opportunities that arise after the competition.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 a
country
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 may have a small land area and simple infrastructure, hosting an international sports event is generally beneficial. It serves to improve the
country
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's economy and provides long-term advantages for the people who live in these developing nations.

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You discuss both sides and give your own view clearly. To make the answer stronger, explain more fully why traffic and noise are a serious problem, and why the money made from the event can last after it ends.
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Your main ideas are clear, but some claims need more support. For example, explain how new jobs, shops, or travel money help local people. Be careful with the Qatar example: say what kinds of new business opened and why this was linked to the event.
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Your last paragraph repeats your view well, but it adds the idea of developing nations only at the end. Either explain this idea earlier or keep the ending focused on the two main points in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear plan: an opening, one paragraph for each side, and an ending. This makes it easy to follow.
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Use links such as “On the one hand”, “For example”, and “As a result” well. However, do not use “often” so many times. You can use “in many cases”, “because of this”, or leave it out.
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Some sentences are long and carry too many ideas. Break them into two shorter sentences, especially in the first body paragraph. This will make the meaning more direct and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same key words through the essay. You use “global events”, “international events”, and “international sports events”. These are fine, but choose one main phrase and use it more often for a smoother flow.
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You answer every part of the question: you show the bad side, the good side, and your own clear view.
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The examples of Bahrain and Qatar make your points more real and help the reader understand your ideas.
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Each body paragraph has one main idea, so the reader can follow your argument without difficulty.
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Your opening and ending clearly show the main topic and your final view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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