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Education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

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Introduction
Nowadays, it is argued that all students might pursue
education
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 without a tuition fee.
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 some disagree with
this
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 statement, I partly agree with it inasmuch as I truly believe that higher
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 should not be free for everyone.
This
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 essay will examine my point of view in detail.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, I’m convinced that states should fund schooling, just because it is compulsory. All democratic governments ideally provide free
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, as their main goal for them is to
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 residents in acquiring basic knowledge and instilling social values.
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 a policy has a positive effect on both the public and the country
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 if poor families cannot pay, educated citizens will maintain a stronger economy. To illustrate, I studied with an exceptionally clever and remarkably intelligent classmate from a low-income family at a state-funded school. He created a media platform when he was 15 with an IT teacher and
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 received a job offer from a sought-after Russian IT company.
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,
this
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 example clearly illustrates my view that compulsory
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 should be free because all children from different families have the right to
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.
Body paragraph 2
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, there are exceptions in the case of higher
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. I would argue that making it entirely free is unrealistic.
Firstly
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, leading universities are extremely expensive to run, ranging from attracting highly qualified specialists to covering maintenance costs. If higher
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 were free for everyone, the state would have to either raise taxes significantly or compromise on quality.
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, not everyone wishes to pursue a degree
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 some people prefer to start working after school and gain practical experience
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.
Therefore
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, funding higher
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 for all would be an inefficient use of public money. A more sensible approach would be a mixed system combining state funding, scholarships and student loans.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I partly agree that
education
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 should be free.
While
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 compulsory schooling must be funded by the state, making higher
education
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 entirely free is unrealistic. A mixed system, combining government funding, scholarships and student loans, would be the most effective solution.

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task response
Your view is clear: school should be free, but university should not be free for all. To make the answer stronger, explain more about who should get free university study, for example students from poor homes or students in key jobs.
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The example of your classmate is useful and linked to your main point. Make the link even clearer by saying how free school gave him a chance that his family may not have been able to pay for.
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Your point about tax and quality is good. Add one short, clear example of how a mixed system could work, such as free places for some students and loans for others.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: your view, free school, paid higher study, then a final summary. Keep this clear plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. In the first main paragraph, “just because” sounds too informal. Use “because” or “since” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long. Split them into two shorter sentences so that the main idea is easier to follow. For example, explain the aim of free school in one sentence and its good results in the next.
coherence and cohesion
Make the first sentence of each body paragraph state the main idea in simple words. This will help the reader see the change from school education to higher education.
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You answer the whole question and give a clear partly agree view from the start to the end.
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Your main ideas are relevant: equal chances in school, the high cost of universities, and fair use of public money.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear purpose, and the final paragraph repeats your main view well.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “To begin with”, “However”, “Firstly”, “Secondly”, and “Therefore” help the reader follow your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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