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The charts above give information on the ages of people when they got married in one country in 1996 and 2008.

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The charts above give information on the ages of people when they got married in one country in 1996 and 2008.
The two bar charts compare the proportion of people getting married across different age
groups
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 in a single country in 1996 and 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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 the percentage of
females
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 who got married was higher than that of males among the young adults, the male figures were dominant across all older age
groups
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. In 1996,
females
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 accounted for the largest share in the 25-29 group. In the 20–24 age group, the share of
females
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 was more than double that of males, at 6% compared to approximately 2.5% in
this
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 year.
However
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, female marriage rates decreased rapidly
rather
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 than male figures
in
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 the
last
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 three
groups
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' patterns
which
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 are 30-34, 35-39 and 40-44. By 2008, there weren't any big changes. The proportion of
females
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 getting married was larger than the male marriage rates in the 20-24 and 25-29
groups
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.
In contrast
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,
this
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 year, the share of
females
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 reduced and remained at the same level as the figure for males
which
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, which
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 are 30-34 and 25-29
groups
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 respectively. Male marriage figures were higher than female's pattern that older than 35.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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