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You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered that you had left a coat there. There are some important belongings in the pockets. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain that you have left the coat there say what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was in the pockets make some suggestions about how to get all of your belongings back

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Dear Veronica, I hope you’re doing great. First of all, I want to say that I really had a good time spending a week in your lovely house; it was quite a memorable experience
to
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 me.
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aftter
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after
 I came home, I noticed that I forgot my
last
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coat
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 there in your home. The
coat
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 is one of my
favorites
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, and there is a valuable item inside
of
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the pocket: my wristwatch. The
color
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colour
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 of the
coat
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 is light brown, and it has a hood.
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, I believe I left it at the back of your front
door
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 where I saw some hooks, so that’s why I hung it there. I totally forgot because I was busy chatting to everyone at that moment. If you don’t mind, if you have some spare time
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 upcoming weekend, we can meet up in a nearby coffee shop, and please bring my
coat
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.
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, I really need the
coat
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 because the weather is getting colder, and I only have a few coats to wear. Hoping for your answer, and please give my regards to your family. Yours truly, Kate

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task response
Say more clearly why the watch is important and ask your friend to check the coat soon. You could also say what to do if the coat is not by the front door.
task response
Check the time in the first line. The task says a weekend, but your letter says a week.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order. To make it even smoother, put the coat details and the place where you left it in the same short part.
coherence and cohesion
Use fewer long lines with many ideas. For example, make the meeting plan a new short part.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words such as "also", "because", and "so". Do not use "Nevertheless" here, as it does not fit the meaning well.
task response
You cover all the main points: the lost coat, what it looks like, where it may be, what is in it, and a plan to get it back.
coherence and cohesion
The letter starts and ends in a warm, polite way, and the ideas are easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You give useful details about the coat, such as its light brown color and hood.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciation
  • accidentally
  • distinctive features
  • fabric
  • inner/outer pockets
  • courier service
  • parcels
  • reimburse
  • inconvenience
  • affectionately
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