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Band 7.5

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday, and when you got home, you realized that you have left your wallet in your friend's house. Write a letter to your friend; thanking for the holiday, explaining that you left your wallet at their place, providing instructions on how to send it back.

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Dear Ali, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I'm writing to thank you for your hospitality in your home, which transformed the holiday into an unforgettable and enjoyable experience. Unfortunately, I left my
wallet
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 in your home. I vividly remember that
last
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 time, I put it in the drawer next to the bed in order to change my clothes. My
wallet
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 is finished in black with white spots. It
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 contains my cards and some money. As my credit, national, and library cards are in the
wallet
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 and I heavily depend on them, I would be grateful if you could send
it
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 by Snapp Box, particularly since it is famous for its fast-delivery system.
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 can greatly help me reach my
wallet
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 as soon as possible and perform my tasks more efficiently. Thank you again for your hospitality and your contribution. I look forward to hearing from you. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
Say where to send the wallet, such as your full home address. This makes the return plan clear.
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Ask your friend to tell you the cost first, so you can pay them back.
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Use a more natural word for the wallet: say it is black with white marks, not that it is “finished” in black.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the last paragraph shorter and more direct.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links such as “Also”, “So”, and “Please” to join your ideas in a smooth way.
coherence and cohesion
“Your contribution” is not clear here. End with a simple line such as “Thank you for your help.”
task response
You thank your friend, explain where the wallet may be, and ask for a fast way to send it back.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main job, and the greeting and closing are warm and polite.
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