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Some experts believe that a second language should be taught at an early age. Do the advantages ouyweigh the disadvantages

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For me I agree
that
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 idea , but if I have a kid, I will teach him
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 second
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 , maybe when he
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 at least nine years old, because I don't want him to forget his first
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. So when he reaches at least nine years old
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 maybe the perfect time to learn a new
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 because when anyone study anything when he was a kids he will master the thing that he learn,
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 if you learn a new
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 my first
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 is Arabic but, when I learned English I got more knowledge in my life and more confidence that you can talk and understand more than half humans .
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, just imagine if you can't speak English and you have a vacation in the USA , what would you do? You can't even order a lunch
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 really bad. So the result is that if you have a young brother or a young kid, you should register them to learn a new thing to make them more aware and educated.
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, you will be happy when you see your kids accomplish. In conclusion, my opinion is Learn a new
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 at an early age is better, and I think it is the best choice.

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Answer both parts in a clear way. Say why starting young is good, but also explain the bad side, such as less time for the first language or too much study for a small child. Then say clearly why the good points are stronger.
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Your own story about Arabic and English is useful. Add one more clear example, such as a child who can talk to people from other countries or has more work choices later in life.
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Keep your main view the same. At first, you say nine may be the best age, but at the end you say early age is best. Explain what you mean by “early” so the reader is not unsure.
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Use a simple four-part plan: first, say your view; next, give the good points; then, give the bad points; last, give your final answer. This will make the essay easier to follow.
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Make each paragraph about one main idea. The first part can be about learning well at a young age. The next part can be about travel, work, and talking with more people.
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Use linking words in a careful way: “First,” “Also,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” Do not put many ideas in one very long sentence. Split long sentences into two or three short ones.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear words for the person you mean. For example, write “children” instead of changing between “anyone,” “he,” “kids,” and “you.”
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You give a clear personal view: learning another language can bring more knowledge and confidence.
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The example about travel in the USA is easy to understand and shows a real need for English.
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You use a conclusion and restate your main view at the end.
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Words like “On the other hand,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help show the order of your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • cognitive development
  • multilingual proficiency
  • curriculum integration
  • linguistic acumen
  • cultural competencies
  • globalization
  • neuroplasticity
  • second language pedagogy
  • academic performance
  • resource-intensive
  • cognitive overload
  • heritage language preservation
  • language immersion
  • parental engagement
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