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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs provide information about the proportion of
using
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households using
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 electrical
equipments
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equipment
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 and the
number
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 of
hours
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 per
week
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 per household in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, it is clear from the first line
gragh
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graph
 that
Refrigerator
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the refrigerator
 and
Vacuum
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the vacuum
 cleaner are the most
using equipments
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used equipment
,
whereas
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 the Washing machine is less than them.
In addition
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, as shown in the second line
graph
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graph,
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 the
number
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 of
hours
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 of using these three machines
are
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is
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 decreasing during that period.
According to
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 what is shown,
Refrigerator
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the refrigerator
 started at 0% in 1920, and
then
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 experienced a sharp
rose
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rise
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 and reached 90% in 1960,
while
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 the other equipments Vaccum cleaner and
Washing
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the washing
machine
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machine,
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 started at 30% and 40% in 1920, respectively
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 after three
years
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years,
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 they are both below the refrigerator. In terms of the
number
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 of
hours
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 per
week
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 per household, the
number
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 of
hours
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 started
by
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at
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 a high
number
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 of
hours
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 at 50
hours
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 per
week
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, and
then
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 dropped significantly
and reached
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to
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 20
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1960, followed by a constant trend till 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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