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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the by thier annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015

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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the by thier annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015
The bar chart illustrates the comparison of American homeowners by their yearly profit, for the years 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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, the salaries of individuals remained unchanged, except
the
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for those with the
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 one with minimum and high income.
To begin
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 with,
in
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from
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 2007
till
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to
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2015
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2015,
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 the people with
50 000
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50,000
-
74 999
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74,999
 and
75 000
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75,000
-99 999$, despite a little
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fluctuation,
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 stayed at the same level
the
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, the
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 third
column
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 above 20
million
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 and
fourth
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the fourth
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 about 15
million
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.
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, the second
column
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 25 000-49 999 started with more than 25
million
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,
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thereafter
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and thereafter
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 in 2011 reached its maximum
30
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of 30
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million
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This
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 is the second greatest number in
this
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 diagram.
In
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On the
 contrary, in
2007
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2007,
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 the first
column
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less
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, less
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 than
25
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25,000
000
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000,
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 stood at 25
million
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 households, the following 2011 was a little below 30
million
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.
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, it fell to 27
million
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 in 2015,
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 the fifth
column
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 in 2007 was
beneath
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below
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 30
million
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. In
2011
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2011,
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 it represented 27
million
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,
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in
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addition
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addition,
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 in
2015
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2015,
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 it reached 33
million
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This
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 is the greatest number for
this
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 chart.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words column, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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