Television dominates the free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Nowadays
television
has become very important for most of the people
. Television
is one of the most attractive scientific technology for people
, many people
have h
abit of watching only Add an article
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the
television
in their spare time
. Although
, people
have lots of work to do in their free time
but
due to dramas and programs Remove the conjunction
apply
people
ignore their other activities. I am agree
with Change the verb form
agree
this
statement and I will share my views related to this
.
Most of the people
includes
watching Change the verb form
include
television
in their hobby, they think that it is useful for them. Undoubtedly television
is good for entertainment, but it necessary to watch it within a limit. Most of the people
watch television
in front of their children, so definitely children also
want it to watch and because of this
they cannot concentrate on their studies properly.
On another hand, watching television
have lots of negative effects on our social lives. For example
, a family having lunch or dinner together and all are watching television
, so at that time
it is good to discuss or share their thoughts rather than watching television
because they should realize it
that it is Correct your spelling
is
v
ery important moment for them.
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Furthermore
, most of the people
are busy due to job and after coming back to h
ome they are habitual of watching Add an article
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a
television
, they not give time
to their family and also
avoid to meet their friends and relatives. Moreover
, if there is w
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the
people
at that time
like to stay at home and not have i
nterest to socialize with their friends, due to which relationships gets weak.
Many of the Add an article
an
people
have awareness about the negative impact of the
watching Remove the article
apply
television
on our health. It Replace the word
affects
effects
our eyes, mind and body. Many doctors Correct your spelling
affects
says
that, watching too much Change the verb form
say
television
can effect
on our cardiovascular system and Correct your spelling
affect
people
those are habitual for sitting in front of t
elevision for Add an article
the
a
l
onger Add an article
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time
can also
gain weight and due to this
the have to suffer with
the problems that Change the preposition
from
occurs
due to obesity.
In conclusion, Change the verb form
occur
people
should have to adapt activities that are good for their health and whenever possible it is good to socialize with friends and relatives. Watching television
will only make people
inactive and will develop l
ack of interest in other useful activities
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