Television dominates the free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Nowadays
television
has become very important for most of the
people
.
Television
is one of the most attractive scientific technology for
people
, many
people
have
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abit of watching only
television
in their spare
time
.
Although
,
people
have lots of work to do in their free
time
but
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due to dramas and programs
people
ignore their other activities. I
am agree
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with
this
statement and I will share my views related to
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. Most of the
people
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watching
television
in their hobby, they think that it is useful for them. Undoubtedly
television
is good for entertainment, but it necessary to watch it within a limit. Most of the
people
watch
television
in front of their children, so definitely children
also
want it to watch and because of
this
they cannot concentrate on their studies properly. On another hand, watching
television
have lots of negative effects on our social lives.
For example
, a family having lunch or dinner together and all are watching
television
, so at that
time
it is good to discuss or share their thoughts rather than watching
television
because they should realize
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that it is
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ery important moment for them.
Furthermore
, most of the
people
are busy due to job and after coming back to
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ome they are habitual of watching
television
, they not give
time
to their family and
also
avoid to meet their friends and relatives.
Moreover
, if there is
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eekend or holiday
people
at that
time
like to stay at home and not have
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nterest to socialize with their friends, due to which relationships gets weak. Many of the
people
have awareness about the negative impact of
the
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watching
television
on our health. It
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effects
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our eyes, mind and body. Many doctors
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that, watching too much
television
can
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on our cardiovascular system and
people
those are habitual for sitting in front of
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elevision for
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onger
time
can
also
gain weight and due to
this
the have to suffer
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the problems that
occurs
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due to obesity. In conclusion,
people
should have to adapt activities that are good for their health and whenever possible it is good to socialize with friends and relatives. Watching
television
will only make
people
inactive and will develop
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ack of interest in other useful activities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Social isolation
  • Cognitive engagement
  • Critical thinking skills
  • Behavioral problems
  • Academic performance
  • Educational programs
  • Documentaries
  • Informative news
  • Relaxation
  • Stress relief
  • Mental well-being
  • Virtual socialization
  • Health issues
  • Obesity
  • Cardiovascular diseases
  • Physical fitness
  • Community events
  • Shared learning experiences
  • Temporary escape
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