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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

There have been immense advances in technology in most aspects of people’s lives, especially in the field of education. Nowadays, an increasing number of
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 rely on computers for research and to produce a perfect paper for school purposes. Others have decided to leave the original way of learning and to get knowledge through online schools. These changes in the learning process have brought a special concern regarding the possible decrease
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mportance of
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 in the classroom. Some people believe the role of
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 started to fade because computers have been helping some
students
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 to progress in their studies quicker compared to studies in an original classroom.
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, in the same classroom,
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 have different intellectual capacities,
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 some would be tied to a slow advance in their studies because of others’ incapability of understanding. In
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 way, pupils could progress in their acquisition of knowledge at their own pace using computers
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 of learning from
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.
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, the presence of a teacher is essential for
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 because
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human contact influences them in positive ways.
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,
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 realize that they are not dealing with a machine but with a human being who deserves attention and respect. They
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 learn the importance of studying in a group and respect for other
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, which helps them improve their social skills.
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,
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 are required in the learning process because they acknowledge some
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’ deficiencies and help them to solve their problems by repeating the same explanation, giving extra exercises or even suggesting a private tutor.
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,
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 can have a better chance of avoiding
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failure in a subject. In conclusion, the role for
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 in the learning process is still very important and it will continue to be
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 in the future because no machine can replace the human interaction and its consequences.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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