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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. New
inventions
makes
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 the
lives
 of
the
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people
 easier. On another hand
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doctors
 are really important persons for us.
Doctors
 are the person who
help
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 us to get well when we become sick. They save our
lives
. In my opinion,
inventions
 and
doctors
 are incomparable both have different roles in our
lives
.
Lots
 of
inventions
 have become
v
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ery important part of our
lives
.
For example
,
aero planes
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aeroplanes
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 by which we can travel and reach to
another countries
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another country
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 earlier as compare to
another
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 means of transportation. Computers which is the most amazing invention. We are totally now become dependent on computers, it has
lots
 of benefits and is useful in many ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools and homes,
people
 use computers to save
lots
 of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments.
Furthermore
,
smart phones
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 are
also
one
 of the most important
inventions
 for peoples.
People
 found it most convenient for them in carrying as well as
lots
 of applications are available due to which they can contact with their family, relatives and friends.
Moreover
, there are
lots
 of things that are invented by inventors that had made
house work
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also
 easy
for example
, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators etc. On another hand
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doctors
 are most knowledgeable persons that can treat different diseases.
Doctors
 study a lot and always want to get rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no
doctors
then
 no
one
 can protect the sick
people
 and mortality rate increase extremely. There are
lots
 of procedures
also
 done to protect
the
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one
 life.
Doctors
 perform different screening and diagnose
d
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isease properly. In conclusion, both have different role and values in our
lives
, without
doctors
 human beings cannot survive
healthy
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 or we can say that no
one
 can be there to protect from illnesses. Obviously
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without inventors
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new
inventions
 cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery
people
 would be able to see.
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