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Convenience foods will become prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that
convenience
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 foods like instant noodles and canned tuna has become more and more popular and is now a great choice for busy people.
However
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, despite their advantages, I do not think that they will one day replace the positions of traditional foods in every family’s fridges, as well as the natural methods to prepare them. On the one hand, I cannot deny the great advantages of
convenience
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 foods.
Firstly
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, they need no or very little preparation, which is perfect for everyone who does not have much time to cook a big meal at home. By simply walking to a nearby grocery store and grabbing a bag of instant noodle, a pack of sausage and some types of vegetable, within 5 minutes, we can have a delicious dinner.
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,
convenience
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 foods sold in stores are usually cheaper compared to traditional foods.
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 may be because prepared foods are produced in bulk by mainly machines in factories, which is both time and cost effective, while fresh produce needs a great amount of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 and care
from
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for
 farmers and usually cannot be harvested at
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 a large amount.
As a result
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, the total amount of money spent on a meal of
convenience
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 foods may be less expensive than that of traditional foods.
On the other hand
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, I think traditional foods are irreplaceable. The main reason for that lies in its longtime presence on dining tables. Generations of families are so used to eating and cooking natural foods at home that it becomes an integral part of their
lives
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life
.
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, they are not likely to be taken place of
by
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of
convenience
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 foods, which were only available on the market a few decades ago. The other reason is that it is widely known that traditional foods are much more nutritious and healthy than
convenience
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 foods. Vegetables and meat or fish in the market can only stay fresh with a day, while the average shelf life of a canned beef can be up to one year. After
such
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 a long period, I doubt that the content of nutrients like protein, vitamins, etc.
can
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Can
 still remain the same as stated on the label which was stuck to the can at the time the food was packed.
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, the artificial preservatives that are added to the food are believed to be harmful to human health. In conclusion,
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 the increasing prevalence of
convenience
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 foods, they cannot totally replace traditional foods because of
many concerns
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the many concerns
 about their questioned nutrient content and the negative effect of preservatives on human health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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