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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own country, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different views about the teaching of national versus global
literature
 and
history
 in schools. Personally, I support the idea that children should study
first
 and foremost the great books and historical events of their own countries. There are several reasons why I believe that schools should focus on teaching national
literature
 and
history
.
Firstly
, children enjoy learning about where they live, and by studying the ideas, culture and
history
 of their own countries they begin to develop a sense of identity. At the same time,
this
 approach is appealing to parents, who studied the same books and historical events and can
therefore
 help their children with school work. English children,
for example
, read Shakespeare and learn about the Battle of Hastings just as their parents did, and there is educational continuity across the generations.
Finally
, an emphasis on national
literature
 and
history
 gives educators a narrower teaching scope, making curriculum design an easier task.
By contrast
, the study of global events and foreign novels could cause unnecessary difficulty and confusion for school pupils.
For example
, I do not see the point in presenting Russian or Chinese
history
 to a British child who has not yet studied the
history
 of his or her own country in detail. Surely the child would be more able to comprehend historical events that took place in London than those that happened in Moscow or Beijing.
Similarly
, any exposure to international
literature
 is likely to require the teaching of a foreign language or the use of translations. Young people at primary or secondary school age are simply not ready for
such
 complications. In conclusion, I would argue that it is undesirable for schools to cover aspects of foreign
history
 and
literature
; they should ground their pupils in the local culture
instead
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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