the traditional that the family gets together to eats meal is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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Over the past few years, there are families who are forgetting the

traditional

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tradition

of the meeting of the whole

familys’

a social unit living together

family

families

members in the meals. We will find out some reasons why

this

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happened and the consequence of

this

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problem. The main cause of

this

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problem is the children who eat in front of

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the TV

. In the modern life, when the industry is in stage of 4.0, following the development of technology. The children have an interest with programmes in the

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such

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as cartoon movies,

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shows for kids or so on. It is not only that, but

also

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they live in a single-parent household what a thing nobody wishes for.

Moreover

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, the more the world grows, the more the people work hard.

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this

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issue leads to

kids’ parents

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the kids’ parents

are careless in taking care of

childrens’

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children’s

children

child’s

Childrens’

meals or they have no time to teach them how the way of correct

eat

the thing named or in question

. The effect of

these

denotes a person or thing

this

has been and will continue to be very serious.

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, it is not good for their health as making them becomes kids’ weakness and to be difficult against diseases. The

second

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, the younger people eat in front of

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the TV

a TV

that influence the form of the

childrens’

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child’s

children

children’s

personality and when they mature in

this

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condition, the

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generation will

also

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be impacted. The truth is, the meals of the family will be not important and break the traditional which was maintained in thousands of years. In conclusion, these

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are

obviously

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obvious

reasons that have a particularly negative effect

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a close-knit family so the people must pay attention to their family more to prevent unhappiness.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

269 words

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the traditional that the family gets together to eats meal is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.To what extent do you agree.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your