Some people think that the best way to ensure road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals argue that raising the minimum legal age for driving
car
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a car
or riding a bike is the most effective method to increase road safety. While I accept that
this
policy is good in some ways, I believe that there are better measures to reduce traffic accidents.
To begin
with, I agree that it is a good idea to increase the minimum age required for driving.
Firstly
, when they are young, they are less mature and responsible for their
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, so they may not be aware of the importance of following the rules.
Therefore
, it is reasonable to ban them from
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
on the street in order to prevent them from breaking the law and causing accidents.
Secondly
, because older people are usually experienced, they can know how to react quickly to handle dangerous situations on the road, while younger ones are not able to do so. To illustrate, if a brake suddenly stops working, a younger driver may be
panic
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panicking
, and an accident is likely to occur.
However
, I believe that there are better methods of ensuring road safety. The
first
one is to have stricter punishments for driving offenders.
For example
, those who break the law should be banned permanently from commuting on the street.
This
may help commuters
be
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are
more likely to respect the law, and traffic accidents may be reduced. Another solution is to encourage residents to use public transport rather than private vehicles.
This
can be done by reducing ticket fares and increasing the frequency of buses or tubes to make them more convenient for users. In conclusion, I argue that apart from increasing the legal age for driving, there are more effective ways to make sure that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
on the street is safe for everyone.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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