The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There is a wild range of
entretainment
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entertainment
activities, in their free time people like to go out of the house and recreate. For that, there is necessary to have entertainment venues, that can be divided
in
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into
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three categories: Sports, Theme Parks and Cinemas. Looking at the first picture, we can
easy
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easily
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note that cinemas are the most visited venues, there were more
tan
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than
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1000
visits
in 2009, Theme Parks were less visited, like 350
visits
aprox
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approx
. And sports venues have less
tan
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than
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200
visits
that year.
This
has a strange
conection
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connection
with the admission price
ticket
.
cinema
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The cinema
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, which has more
visits
, is the one that has the lowest price
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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ticket
, only $15, and
also
have
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has
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a familiar
ticket
, for 4 people, that
costs
only $55. Sports have different
tipes
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types
of events, that have a range of prices, the lowest is the Cricket Game
that
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which
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costs
$24 and the highest is the football game-AFL,
wich
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which
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is priced at $75. One
ticket
to a Theme Park
costs
$70 and the family
ticket
costs
$210
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