Some people think that the best way to ensure road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

On the one hand,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that it is a good idea to increase
minimum legal age
Suggestion
the minimum legal age
for driving cars or riding motorbikes.
Fristly
Suggestion
Firstly
, young people are less mature and less responsible with their manners, so they might not be aware of the importance of
flowing
about to be mentioned or specified
following
rules.
Therefore
, increasing minimum legal age can decrease traffic accidents and prevent them from breaking the laws.
Secondly
, young people
cant
can not
can't
control exactly their vehicle when they meet a dangerous situation
For example
, the car speeds out of control because the accelerator
don’t working
Suggestion
is not working
isn’t working
, the older people clam down and they change gears in low gear combine
with
Suggestion
to
hit break but the young people
dont
do not
don't
have more experience so
acident
an unfortunate mishap; especially one causing damage or injury
accident
soon occur
Suggestion
soon occurs
.
Submitted by ngothenamvn on

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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