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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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These days, many people made their decision to give birth in later stages of
life
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. There are a lot of reasons for
this
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 trend, and the effects can be clearly seen
on
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in
society
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 and family
life
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. There are several reasons why many couples give birth
late
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later
 in
life
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.
Firstly
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, young parents want to focus on their career to solve problems about money and find
right ways
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the right ways
 to earn a living. They decide to delay having the
first
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 child because they need to save up enough money to make sure that their
life
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 is wealthy.
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, older parents can take care of their children more carefully. In fact, parents in their old age are more experienced and ready to be responsible for caring about the children. Having children later in
life
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 brings about negative and positive impacts on
society
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 and families. On the one hand, the mother is likely to suffer from many health problems
such
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 as high blood pressure.
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, it is harder for
old
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older
 parents
to understand
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understand
 and communicate with younger children due to
generation gap
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the generation gap
a generation gap
.
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, children of old couples are more healthy thanks to better education and living conditions.
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, they will make effective labour force and
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 contribute a lot to the development of
society
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. To conclude, parents want to be rich and prepare best conditions before having their
first
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 child.
That is
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 why they choose to give birth late, and
this
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 trend affects the
society
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 as well as families both positively and negatively.
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