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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that raising the minimum age at which people can drive cars or ride motorbikes will improve
road
 safety. While I agree that
this
 will somewhat solve the problem, more efforts should be put into nurturing people’s awareness of
traffic
 problems and the feasible consequences thereof. On the one hand, raising the bar to the legal driving age could reduce the incidents of reckless driving on the
road
 and
therefore
 make sure that the
road
 is safe enough for everyone.
This
 is because many teenagers do not take full responsibility for their own and other’s safety and often commit driving offences. Even if they cause
traffic
 accidents, they just do not have enough legal capacity to be responsible for those accidents and the ones who suffer injuries or even fatalities therefrom.
For example
, in Vietnam, there have been cases where teenagers do not wear helmets, speed and ride their motorbikes in the wrong lanes. These teenagers,
however
, are not incarcerated if they crashed and kill other people.
On the other hand
, to change the situation for the better in the long run, people should be educated about the consequences of driving carelessly. Images and billboards that feature real-life consequences of
traffic
 accidents might be displayed on
roads
Suggestion
the roads
 where accidents often take place.
This
 visual evidence might deter people from driving recklessly and causing accidents.
Also
, schools at all levels could be asked to have training programs about
traffic
 rules in their curricula and these should be repeated every year so that the rules can be embedded in students’ minds. These programs might
then
 culminate in projects where students apply what they have learned to spread their awareness
to
Suggestion
in
 their communities. In conclusion,
although
 restricting the number of people who can drive by their age can make the experience on the
road
 safer for everyone, it is more important that people be educated about what they can and cannot do.
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