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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity?

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According to a lot of studies, cycling can be hugely beneficial for people who want to improve their health. Despite of the benefits of cycling, few people are using a
bicycle
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 as a mean of transportation. In my opinion, the following reasons are the answers
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to
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 issue.
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 of all, using a bike to travel around transport is
time
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-consuming. The speed of
bicycle
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 cannot compare with that of other vehicles’ speed
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 as motorcycles and, automobiles, train, etc., so that it takes more
time
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 to travel by
bicycle
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.
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, if a commuter wants to go by
bicycle
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 to work on
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 in
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 a congested city like Hanoi, he must leave home very early soon in the morning and go back home late at night.
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,
Hhe
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he
 loses lots of
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 for travelling meanwhile he can spend that
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 doing other things.
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, those who do not have the strength to ride a bike over in a long distance cannot ride it regularly.
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, the high or low temperature outside can affect the rider’s health, and they could feel exhausted due to the lack of physical. To encourage people to
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use
 use bicycles, the government should create some programs with valuable prizes. And these programs should be conducted annually to make biking habits
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of
 citizens.
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, the effects of cycling have to be spread so people can be aware of the importance of cycling. The companies should
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 have the bonus wages for employees who ride to work.
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, how to maintain and develop cycling should be one of the biggest concerns of the government.
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