You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

I hope that you are doing well. I’m writing

this

letter to inform you that I want to open a new business. I have decided to start a new café as I have experience in the food sector. I

also

asked a bank manager about total expenses and the loan process.

First,

I will tell you the reason for opening a new business. I moved to the city around 2 months ago, and my apartment is located in the middle of the city.

Furthermore

, I noticed that people need to travel so far to buy coffee or other fast food. So, I

through

Correct your spelling

thought

show examples

it is the best area to start a new café with snacks.

In addition

, I don’t have much knowledge about planning. I know you can easily manage. I would like you to advise me on making the proper planning structure and

also

the estimated cost.

Although

I have enough knowledge about managing the food industry, I definitely need your support to start my new business. Waiting for your positive response. Best Regards,

Prinsi

Correct your spelling

Submitted by Darshita@8612 on Tue Nov 05 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence & Cohesion

To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using a clearer sequence of ideas and smoother transitions between sentences.

Task Achievement

Provide more detailed information about the business plan and how your friend can assist you further to enhance task response.

Coherence & Cohesion

The greeting and closing are well-covered and appropriate for a personal letter.

Task Achievement

The letter maintains a friendly and conversational tone which is suitable for writing to a friend.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

176 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Q. Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.
In recent times, criminal activities are becoming
7.5
band
Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, say what the importance of this historic building is mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future Write at least 150 words.
I am writing this letter to suggest you that, do not demolish the Taj Mahal building located in the Sivaji Area of our city which is famous not only in our city but also in our nation.
4
band
More and more people prefer to read e-book rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this cause for libraries?
At the moment, it is the cutting-edge era, that can be accessing to a wide range of books more easily from a device. Thus, an advantage of readers who was easy to found pay attention to books that a positive way. On the other hand, this era can be making least to read on prined-books. I will illustrate about the reason why most the people prefer electronic books more than printer books.
<4
band
The only reason for people working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Generally, Money is the most essential part of our life. Without any money we can not do anything in todays context. I am totally agree with the statement.
5.5
band
As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
The more social media becomes famous, reading newspapers is becoming old fashioned. I agree with this argument to a larger extent, however, to a lesser degree I disagree with this assertion.

You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

The Greeting

Q. Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.

More and more people prefer to read e-book rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this cause for libraries?

The only reason for people working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.