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Advertisements are influencing us in a negative way; to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#advertisements
The process of externalization of a product through a variety of
medium
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mediums
media
such
 as banners, pamphlets and television
are called
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is called
advertisements
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the advertisements
. Though the delivery mechanism has flourished and became more interactive, yet it has been observed that advertisements are affecting our routine
life
 adversely. Lately, advertisements seen to have negative impact due to lack of censorship of content and inclusion of children as eye candy. To embark on, there has been an array of reasons why advertisements have a horrible effect on our lives.
First
 of all, there has been no control and censorship
on
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of
 the content displayed or projected through advertisements, which leads to an inappropriate digestion and interpretation of information.
Furthermore
, major method for publishing advertisements are big banners on the crowded market and walkways, which makes visibility down the path a challenge and in-turn results in accidents or harm to human
life
 in any form. As per the recent survey, 84% of accidents or harm to human
life
 happens due to these
distractive
causing destruction or much damage
destructive
 advertisements down the roads.
Further
 to accord, to make advertisements more attractive there has been a shift in the focus to children. Involving tender buds into the advertisements have a negative impact on their studies and overall development of co-operation and social bonding. Monetary benefits associated with the media world brim these children with pride and attention seeking nature resulting in isolating them from the family and friends as they are busier seeking money and fame.
This
 isolation results in depression, health issues
such
 as hypertension, obesity and medical problems. In summary, undoubtedly, advertisements do provide information about new products and their benefits to users,
however
, the demerits of these externalization of information and content outnumbered it’s merits to our daily
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intrusive
  • Omnipresent
  • Culture of consumerism
  • Materialism
  • Unrealistic standards
  • Self-esteem
  • Targeting strategies
  • Privacy invasion
  • Psychological manipulation
  • Overexposure
  • Decision fatigue
  • Conscious
  • Informed choices
  • Biased
  • Mislead
  • Critical sectors
  • Repetition
  • Environmental degradation
  • Throwaway culture
  • Non-durable goods
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