The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government should reflect this. To what extent do you agree

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Government
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spending usually shows where it's priority lies. In
healthcare
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, it is said that
prevention
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of health problems and illness is more important than
treatment
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and medicine, and
therefore
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,
government
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funding should reflect it.
This
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essay will discuss why I agree with
this
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notion. It is a popular saying that
prevention
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is better than cure. It will be more beneficial to a
government
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and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
citizens to budget more on
prevention
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than
treatment
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. One major reason is that the cost of
treatment
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is often higher than the cost of
prevention
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. Purchasing medicine or having to undergo
surgeory
the branch of medical science that treats disease or injury by operative procedures
surgery
surgeries
in order to treat a disease requires a lot of money. On the order hand, when money is spent on projects
such
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as sensitization or vaccinations, the cost incurred by the
government
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will be less in the long
run especially,
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run, especially
for a nation that takes the
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healthcare
Suggestion
health care
of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
people importantly.
For example
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, the United States spends 40 percent of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
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healthcare
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health care
budget on sensitization, and a recent report by their department of health attributed the reduction of sexually transmitted diseases to increased sensitization.
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,
prevention
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promotes mental and emotional well-being as well. People who have never contacted a disease are less likely to be depressed.
This
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can really improve the standard of living in a community or nation. Take or instance the recent list of the 10 happiest countries in the world. A common feature among them them is a good
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healthcare
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health care
plan and low sickness or disease
occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that
government
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funding should focus more on
prevention
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of
healthcare
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problems than
treatment
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or medicine even though the latter should
also
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be a critical component of
helthcare
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
funding.
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