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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

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People have differing views with regard to the question of whether shared freely
information
 in scientific research, business and the academic or not. In my opinion, I completely believe that each method could have pros and cons.
This
 essay would discuss and give some examples to reinforce my view. On the one hand, it is undeniable that
information
 play as a vital role in life aspects,
as a result
, freely sharing
information
 helps people to widen knowledges and get easily approach technology better. Specifically, the largest
proport
something owned; any tangible or intangible possession that is owned by someone
property
profit
 of collecting
information
 falling to the student, they need to research for their courses and the modest
information
 able to make them confused. The library system in some university is a perfect example in
this
 circumstance, the student could share and update quickly
information
 for others to
this
 website without fees.
Therefore
, there is an effective idea to encourage student becoming more assiduous.
Furthermore
, in some social media
such
 as Facebook, Google has the range of website that
unlimitedly
 sharing knowledge leads to an increase in self-learning of students
On the other hand
, I think that the author who created and developed
information need
Suggestion
an information need
 to have a reward for their intelligence. Management of sharing
information
 could protect copyright and reduce duplicate in research.
Moreover
, the
information
 distributing in free sources likely to incorrect and harmful. To sum up, there is a mixed variety of
information
 in science, business and academic. People need to carefully choose to avoid negative
information
 and violate the law of copyright.
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