The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should realise this. To what extent do you agree?

Owing to the phrase " Prevention is better than cure"
,
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,
government should promote
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
and aid in providing
clean environment
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a clean environment
for people to lead a happy and healthy life. In my opinion, our public sectors should help devise
plan
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plans
and allocate funds in preventing health issues caused by pollution, inorganic foods as these are the major contribution
for
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to
illness.
Firstly
, our industries
are
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is
the main reason for major diseases
prevelant
most frequent or common
prevalent
among individuals.
For example
, toxic gases like carbon monoxide releases
by
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from
factories causes global warming and pollute the environment.
Government
Suggestion
The government
should demand factories for ways to avoid polluting environment or if the toxic emission in beyond the permissible level the entities should be penalized and the licence should be cancelled.
In addition
, government should
also
fund for planting more number of trees and plants in order to reduce global warming.
Secondly
, country should allocate
major chunk
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a major chunk
of its budget for organic farming. Because the consumption of vegetables and fruits cultivated by
inoranic
relating or belonging to the class of compounds not having a carbon basis
inorganic
farming
(
Accept space
(
uses
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use
pesticides) causes illness. To live a healthy long life one need to consume organic staples. In conclusion, a well created plan and channelized money by
government
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governments
the government
will help in preventing health issues.
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