The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should realise this. To what extent do you agree?

Owing to the phrase " Prevention is better than cure"
Accept space
,
,
government should promote
having knowledge of
awareness
awerness
and aid in providing
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a clean environment
clean environment
for people to lead a happy and healthy life. In my opinion, our public sectors should help devise
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plans
plan
and allocate funds in preventing health issues caused by pollution, inorganic foods as these are the major contribution
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to
for
illness.
Firstly
, our industries
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is
are
the main reason for major diseases
most frequent or common
prevalent
prevelant
among individuals.
For example
, toxic gases like carbon monoxide releases
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from
by
factories causes global warming and pollute the environment.
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The government
Government
should demand factories for ways to avoid polluting environment or if the toxic emission in beyond the permissible level the entities should be penalized and the licence should be cancelled.
In addition
, government should
also
fund for planting more number of trees and plants in order to reduce global warming.
Secondly
, country should allocate
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a major chunk
major chunk
of its budget for organic farming. Because the consumption of vegetables and fruits cultivated by
relating or belonging to the class of compounds not having a carbon basis
inorganic
inoranic
farming
Accept space
(
(
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use
uses
pesticides) causes illness. To live a healthy long life one need to consume organic staples. In conclusion, a well created plan and channelized money by
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governments
the government
government
will help in preventing health issues.

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