Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Plethora of governments thinks, and I agree, that economic progress is crucial for
country
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the country
countries
. As opposed, others believe that other ways of progress are
also
important for a
country
. On the one hand, a wealthiness is
main engine
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the main engine
for a progress. The economics influences on all spheres of
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
For instance
, for money
government
can provide lots of demands for
country
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a country
such
as free education, free
healthcare
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health care
and
impovement
a change for the better; progress in development
improvement
of technology.
Moreover
, economic increase is one of the
indicator
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indicators
of well-developing
country
on
world arena
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the world arena
,
therefore
, it is most important goal for some countries.
On the other hand
, other spheres of
government
are
also
important. Since
a
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an
economy depended on
plethora
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a plethora
of things, without quality
education
Accept comma addition
education, government
government
can not build
superb
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the superb country
country
.
In addition
, a
country
stays on people, due to it,
government
should provide
population
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a population
the population
of
country
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the country
a country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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